I missed these posts but the direction you have taken with your logline and premise is intriguing! Its like a completely different tangent from the usual ideas surrounding the characteristics of an inventor. It also feels like the beauty equipment she finds almost gives her the identity in which the world is deprived of :)
However, perhaps your character biography is a little concise, so you maybe developing the background of your character could help you figure out more about your story or its subtext? Maybe create a past about the characters father and how he passed? or maybe how he became the trombonist? or even how he kept the big secret from his daughter?
Just a thought, but it really helped me out when finding the holes and weaknesses within my own story :)
Hey Jebb,
ReplyDeleteI missed these posts but the direction you have taken with your logline and premise is intriguing! Its like a completely different tangent from the usual ideas surrounding the characteristics of an inventor. It also feels like the beauty equipment she finds almost gives her the identity in which the world is deprived of :)
However, perhaps your character biography is a little concise, so you maybe developing the background of your character could help you figure out more about your story or its subtext? Maybe create a past about the characters father and how he passed? or maybe how he became the trombonist? or even how he kept the big secret from his daughter?
Just a thought, but it really helped me out when finding the holes and weaknesses within my own story :)